High schools should allow students to study the courses that students want to study

2016-08-11 · 첨삭 강사 Nina

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These days, lots of students argue that curriculum should be focused on what they really want to learn the subject which is practical. As I was the student who felt the same way when I was in high school, I strongly agree with this statement. There has been regulated subject that is compulsory to learn such as Japanese, art and music. Of course, it is better to know about these fields to acquire knowledge that we couldn’t have got if we hadn’t learnt. When I remind of the time I studied , It was so demanding and I was almost fed up with studying for main subjects. It also requires many students to put much effort to master or get a high score. In addition, it was also competitive among those students who born to be talented with great skills. It seemed like almost torture to us. If we have a right to select the subject, we were willing to exert our effort as much as possible. Knowing that it is like a torture, they should stand the side for student not depending on education rules.

강사 첨삭

Wonderful Thursday to you [이름]! One more day to go before the long weekend. ^^ I hope that you will have a marvelous time. ^^ You are right. I also had a difficult time when I was still a student. Don\'t worry the hard labor will bring a great future to us. ^^ Have a great night. Sleep tight. See you in class. Teacher Nina   These days, lots of students argue that curriculum should be focused on what they really want to learn the subject which is practical. >> correct As I was the student who felt the same way when I was in high school, I strongly agree with this statement. >> I also felt the same way when I was a student in high school, I strongly agree with this statement. ( Be careful with your word order ^^) There has been regulated subject that is compulsory to learn such as Japanese, art and music. >> correct Of course, it is better to know about these fields to acquire knowledge that we couldn’t have got if we hadn’t learnt. >> correct When I remind of the time I studied , It was so demanding and I was almost fed up with studying for main subjects. >> When I reminisce the time I studied, it was so demanding and I was almost fed up studying the main subjects. (reminisce would be the best term to use. ^^) >> OR: When I reminisce the time I studied, it was so demanding and I was almost fed up studying the major subjects. It also requires many students to put much effort to master or get a high score. >> correct In addition, it was also competitive among those students who born to be talented with great skills. >> In addition, it was also competitive among those students who were born to be talented with great skills. It seemed like almost torture to us. >> correct If we have a right to select the subject, we were willing to exert our effort as much as possible. >> If we had the right to select the subject, we were willing to exert our effort as much as possible. ( If you started with past tense, the next verbs should be past tense form. ^^) Knowing that it is like a torture, they should stand the side for student not depending on education rules. >> Knowing that it is like a torture, they should stand on the side of the student not depending on the education rules.

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