hihi!
학생이 쓴 원문
강사 첨삭
Hello, Sujin!
I\'d be glad to help. ^^
I hope to see you soon ^^
*Why we should hire you?
>> Why should we hire you?
I’m strong enough to keep my passengers in an emergency situation or unexpected situation as I’ve been learning Korean martial arts.
>> I’m strong enough to keep my passengers calm especially during an emergency situation or unexpected situation as I’ve been learning Korean martial arts.
It’s kind of art of self defense.
>> It’s a kind of art on self defense.
I’ve been learning how to protect myself from dangerous situations and how to be more healthy person.
>> I’ve been learning how to protect myself from dangerous situations and how to be a much healthier person.
I believe keeping safety is most important duty to work well as a cabin crew. So my physical strength would help me to take my responsibilty well.
>> I believe that keeping my safety is the most important duty to work well as a cabin crew.
So my physical strength would help me to take my responsibilty well.
>> So, my physical strength would help me take my responsibilty well.
*When do you get stress?
>> When do you get stressed?
I don\'t get stress easily but I got stress when I broke my rule.
>> I don\'t get stressed easily but I get stressed when I break my rules.
I feel comfortable when I keep rules that I made or required me to keep.
>> I feel comfortable when I keep rules that I made or required for me to keep.
One of my rule is ‘Don’t drunk’
But it was when one of my friend’s birthday, I was attempting to get into the spirit of things.
So I over-drank and blacked out.
>> One of my rules is ‘Don’t get drunk’ but during one of my friend’s birthday, I just wanted to feel wild so I overdrank.
But the next day, I regret so much and feel in deep remorse that I couldn\'t keep my rule.
>> The next day, I regret doing it and for that I couldn\'t keep my rule.
>> OR: The next day, I felt deep remorse because I couldn\'t keep my rule.
So ever since that day, I try to enjoy and act my life within the rule I made.
>> Ever since that day, I try to enjoy and act my life within the rule I made.
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