history of my hometown, wish for the day
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Can you tell me about some history of your hometown?
- There were 3 countries in Korea in the past. When the period that 3 countiries had the last war, Ulsan, my hometown, was included in won country. So unlike other areas, there are many remained traditional things. And many people come to my area to see Korean cultures. That was beautiful and amazing for the first time, but now I don\'t feel anything.
Write about your wish for the day
- I wish many things like going to the mall, movie theater, and eating delicious foods. Whenever I do these, I feel very happy and worried at the same time. It\'s because for my future, I have to my studying. By doing my work, I feel comfortable and I don\'t hate that. So I like to go somewhere I can enjoy sometimes.
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Thank you again. ^_^
Can you tell me about some history of your hometown?
>> Correct.
- There were 3 countries in Korea in the past.
>> Correct. (BUT I think what you mean is.)
>> There were 3 kingdoms in Korea in the past.
When the period that 3 countiries had the last war, Ulsan, my hometown, was included in won country.
>> During that time, Ulsan, my hometown was also one of the ones who won.
So unlike other areas, there are many remained traditional things.
>> So unlike other areas, a lot of traditions remained in my area.
And many people come to my area to see Korean cultures.
>> And, many people comes to my area to see Korean cultures that are left behind.
That was beautiful and amazing for the first time, but now I don\'t feel anything.
>> It looked like it is so beautiful and amazing for the first time, but now I don\'t feel anything.
Write about your wish for the day.
>> Correct.
- I wish many things like going to the mall, movie theater, and eating delicious foods.
>> I wish for many things like going to the mall, movie theater, and eating delicious foods.
Whenever I do these, I feel very happy and worried at the same time.
>> Correct.
It\'s because for my future, I have to my studying.
>> It\'s because for my future, I have to keep on studying.
By doing my work, I feel comfortable and I don\'t hate that. So I like to go somewhere I can enjoy sometimes.
>> Correct.
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