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Q. Would you personally consider adoption as an option for the aging population in your country? Explain your answer.
A. If the meaning of \"adoption\" is adoption from abroad, it should not be done as an ageing policy. because adoption should be a home specific right. If there are some policy for encourage adoption from abroad, some people adopt children for only social gain without love and responsibility. It cause huge misfortune to child.
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Q. Would you personally consider adoption as an option for the aging population in your country? Explain your answer.
A. If the meaning of \"adoption\" is adoption from abroad, it should not be done as an ageing policy. because adoption should be a home specific right.
>>> If the meaning of \"adoption\" is adoption from abroad, it should not be done as a solution to the aging population because it should be home-specific.
If there are some policy for encourage adoption from abroad, some people adopt children for only social gain without love and responsibility.
>>> If there are some policies for encouraging adoption from abroad, then some people adopt children for social gain alone without love and responsibility.
It cause huge misfortune to child.
>>> In that case, it causes huge misfortune to the child.
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