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once upon a time , there was three sisters who spend a normal day as usual ,living in the deep mountian. Their parents died long ago. The first's name is Po ,the second's name is Wo, the third's name is Englia. Suddenly something was happened. Po and Woo heard a scream of Englia. When they found out Englia, she is already unconscious and having a mushroom in her hand. The mushroom is called 'curse of devil' . Po and Woo immediately decided to go enchanted forest to seek a witch who is the only one had antidotes in the world for her sister. But in short time, they reached an impasse. The witch's place was in mistery and they had only one clue of unsolved legend story. Legend has it that "when you find the broken tree under the thunder raring , then it is." They do their best But they couldn't solve that mystery. And one day later ,their younger sister waked up, By then they realized that the mushroom's poison could be self- detox.

Hi Jenna! ^^ Thank you for making such a beautiful story. I like it! kk. It\'s detailed and you were able to use all the vocabularied that I provided. You are creative and very imaginative. Your skill is rare. So, you should develop it. Maybe writing stories could be your side-line because you are good at composing your own story. I really look forward to your next composition. kk. Take care always! ^^ See yoou! ^^   ~~Teacher Kris   once upon a time , there was three sisters who spend a normal day as usual ,living in the deep mountian. >> Once upon a time , there were three sisters who spend a normal day as usual ,living in the deep mountian. Their parents died long ago. >> Their parents died a long long time ago. The first\'s name is Po ,the second\'s name is Wo, the third\'s name is Englia. >> Correct Suddenly something was happened. >> Suddenly something happened.  Po and Woo heard a scream of Englia. >> Po and Woo heard the scream of Englia. When they found out Englia, she is already unconscious and having a mushroom in her hand. >> When they found Englia, she was already unconscious and holding a mushroom in her hand.  The mushroom is called \'curse of devil\' . >> Correct Po and Woo immediately decided to go enchanted forest to seek a witch who is the only one had antidotes in the world for her sister. >> Po and Woo immediately decided to go to the enchanted forest to seek a witch who have the only antidotes in the world for her sister. But in short time, they reached an impasse. >> Correct The witch\'s place was in mistery and they had only one clue of unsolved legend story. >> The witch\'s place was in mistery and they had only one clue of the unsolved legendary story. Legend has it that \"when you find the broken tree under the thunder raring , then it is.\" >> Correct They do their best But they couldn\'t solve that mystery. >> They did their best but they couldn\'t solve that mystery. And one day later ,their younger sister waked up, By then they realized that the mushroom\'s poison could be self- detox. >> And one day later ,their younger sister woke up. By then they realized that the mushroom\'s poison could be a healing treatment.