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HOMEWORK: Is it easy to start a business in your country?
In Korea, first starting business is very hard for everyone.
Because, If you started business, you need to money called start-up elementary cost.
For example. If you made your own cafe, you need cafe machine and decorating inner interior and very various what to do.
So, It have a solution, called working convention.
It held big scale each every years in COEX.
COEX is very large convention hall and There is a lot of items and can be around which you really want to do things.
Perfectly, I want to say if someone started business, that \"Don\'t be afraid, Fail is mother of success\"
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In Korea, first starting business is very hard for everyone.
>> In Korea, starting a business is very hard for everyone.
Because, If you started business, you need to money called start-up elementary cost.
>>Because, if you started a business, you need money to start-up the elementary cost.
For example. If you made your own cafe, you need cafe machine and decorating inner interior and very various what to do.
>>For example. If you have your own cafe, you need a coffee machine and you need to decorate the inner interior and various things to do.
So, It have a solution, called working convention.
>>So, it has a solution, called working convention.
It held big scale each every years in COEX.
>>It is held on a big scale every year in COEX.
COEX is very large convention hall and There is a lot of items and can be around which you really want to do things.
>>COEX is a very large convention hall and there is a lot of items around, and also things that can help you.
I want to say if someone started business, that \"Don\'t be afraid, Fail is mother of success\"
>>I want to say if someone started business, that \"Don\'t be afraid, failure is the mother of success\"
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