hobbies

I like to go to a park when the weather is good. There is a big park named Olympic park, near my house . Olympic park is a really big park, similar to central park in new York. Threre is a big lake and stream which flows through the park so lots of people love to take a walk or jog along the stream. I also go out for a walk or sometimes ride a bicycle. I hope it gets warmer soon, so I can go to the park oftenly. I like to play guitar. I learned how to play guitar when I was in middle school. Since then, I practiced guitar steadily and when I was in high school, I joined a school band as an electric guitarist. Our band performed in front of the whole school. It was an unforgettable memories. Nowdays, when I am under stress, I play guitar and it makes me feel much better.

Hi Kyu-min! I play the guitar myself. Playing the guitar makes me feel relaxed after a long day from work. It is also a good way to vent out when you are feeling depressed or simply not in a good mood. Moreover it's a good way to meet new people and friends! -Dominic           I like to go to a park when the weather is good. >>CORRECT >>I like going to the park when the weather is good. [or] There is a big park named Olympic park, near my house . >>There is a big park named[or called] Olympic Park near my house. Olympic park is a really big park, similar to central park in new York. >>The Olympic park is really big, it is similar to Central Park in New York. [always capitalize proper nouns] Threre is a big lake and stream which flows through the park so lots of people love to take a walk or jog along the stream. >>CORRECT I also go out for a walk or sometimes ride a bicycle. >>CORRECT  I hope it gets warmer soon, so I can go to the park oftenly. >>I hope it gets warmer soon, so I can go to the park often.   I like to play guitar. >>CORRECT I learned how to play guitar when I was in middle school. CORRECT  Since then, I practiced guitar steadily and when I was in high school, I joined a school band as an electric guitarist. >>Since then, I practiced playing the guitar regularly . >>[New Sentence] When I was in high school, I joined a band [school band is different] as an electric guitarist. >>[OR] When I was in high school, I joined band and I played the rhythm guitar. Our band performed in front of the whole school. >>CORRECT It was an unforgettable memories. >>It was full of unforgettable memories.  [the article AN is singular, so memories should be memory] Nowdays, when I am under stress, I play guitar and it makes me feel much better. >> Nowadays, when I am under a lot of stress [or stressed-out], I play guitar and it makes me feel much better. >>Nowadays, when I am under a lot of stress [or stressed-out] I pick up my guitar play a few notes and it makes me feel much better.