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2013-10-22 · 첨삭 강사 Jane

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In not less than eight sentences, write a composition about the following question: "What color represents your personality? Why?" I do like yellow color like yellow flowers, yellow skirts, yellow bags and so on. but I've never thought what color represents my perisonality. I am thinking now and I can tell you that red can represent my pernonality. Red color is hot, strong, noticeble and seductive. I am very passionate person like red color. I remember me that I became more passionat when I fell in love. If you ask me that I am still passionate to love, I say, Yes!. I cannot live without loving and being loved. I want to live rest of my life like red color strong and passionate.

강사 첨삭

A wonderful Tuesday to you! How have you been? I knew you would give me such an impressive essay today. You did a good job! I actually love reading this one. I think that red goes well with your personality. You have mentioned that you are a passionate person, so I\'m sure that you are passionate about learning English too...You have expressed yourself very well in this one. Keep it up! See you. T.Jane Here are your corrections: hoemwork >> Homework In not less than eight sentences, write a composition about the following question:>>CORRECT \"What color represents your personality? Why?\" >>CORRECT >>Or you can also use What color represents your personality and why?I do like yellow color like yellow flowers, yellow skirts, yellow bags and so on. >> I like things that are yellow such as flowers, skirts, bags, and so on. but I\'ve never thought what color represents my perisonality. >>But I\'ve never thought of a color that represents my personality.I am thinking now and I can tell you that red can represent my pernonality. >> Now I think red represents my personality >>You can also use: Now I think red can represent my personality Red color is hot, strong, noticeble and seductive. >> Red is hot, strong, noticeable, and seductive. I am very passionate person like red color. >> I am a very passionate person like the color red. I remember me that I became more passionat when I fell in love. >> Do you mean it like this: I remember that I become more passionate when I am in love >> Or like this: I remember that I am more passionate when I fell in love. If you ask me that I am still passionate to love, I say, Yes!. >> If you\'ll ask me If I\'m still passionate about love, I will say yes! I cannot live without loving and being loved. >>CORRECT! Very good ^^ I want to live rest of my life like red color strong and passionate. >>I want to live for the rest of my life being strong and passionate like the color red.

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