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2014-12-01 · 첨삭 강사 Kathrine

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Does technology make us more alone? Yes, it does. Technolegy makes us very comfort and convenient. There is no time to be alone because of technology. People use their smart phone everywhere even a very short time. It means we don't actually have time to wait for something. However why I answered technolegy makes us alone. Because we don't have any time to have convesation or community with others. We have conversation with others through technology all the time. We can not feel it normarlly but when we feel sad or mad, we can feel like we have a big hole inside our heart eventhough we have them. Technology makes our life better but it can not be instead of human.

강사 첨삭

Good afternoon once again Ms. [이름]!

Well, technology has its pros and cons.

Technology is more convenient when somebody is far from us but it makes us away with people who are near us.

Since we tend to socialize by using our smartphone and not having a great conversation with someone.

But it depends too on the person of he/she would tolerate that.
Thanks for your time today!
You take care too!

Always,
Kathrine ^^


Does technology make us more alone?

Yes, it does.

>> correct!

Technolegy makes us very comfort and convenient.

>> Technology makes us very comfort able and convenient.
 There is no time to be alone because of technology.

>> correct!

 People use their smart phone everywhere even a very short time.

>> People use their smart phone everywhere even  in a very short time.

 It means we don\'t actually have time to wait for something.

>> correct!

However why I answered technolegy makes us alone.

>> correct!

 Because we don\'t have any time to have convesation or community with others.

>> Because we don\'t have any time to have a conversation or socialize with others.

 We have conversation with others through technology all the time.

>> We have a conversation with others through technology all the time.

We can not feel it normarlly but when we feel sad or mad, we can feel like we have a big hole inside our heart eventhough we have them.

>> correct!

Technology makes our life better but it can not be instead of human.

  >> Technology makes our life better but it does not make us humans instead.

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