holiday

2021-07-27 · 첨삭 강사 Elise

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If I can make a holiday, I want to make a holiday on my birthday. My birthday is March 21st, when the new semester starts at school. So I will play with new friends that morning and spend time with my family in the evening. I remember being busy all the time because my birthday is the new semester. So I want to make that day a holiday.

강사 첨삭

Hi Yeong! ^^

Wow! That\'s a great choice! I think that would be a great holiday that you will enjoy.

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If I can make a holiday, I want to make a holiday on my birthday.

>>If I can make a holiday, I want to make my birthday a holiday.

My birthday is March 21st, when the new semester starts at school.

>>My birthday is on March 21st, the day when new semesters starts in schools.

So I will play with new friends that morning and spend time with my family in the evening.

>> CORRECT

I remember being busy all the time because my birthday is the new semester.

>> I remember being busy all the time because my birthday is the start of a new semester.

So I want to make that day a holiday.

>> CORRECT

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