Holiday
학생이 쓴 원문
강사 첨삭
Hi [이름],
A great Friday to you!
Thank you for sending me your composition and telling me about your family. At least now, I have a glimpse of your family. I agree with you when you said that holidays are meant to be spend with our family. Everybody seems to be very busy everyday going to school or to work that sometimes we don\'t even have time to eat with our family. Simple things that a family should do together are often times neglected because of our busy lives. So this short vacation is in a way a reminder of the importance of a family. By the way, I think you are an excellent writer.
Take care!
~T. Lynn
I think holiday is holy day. Because I have a break time for myself.
>>I think holiday is a holy day because I have a break time for myself.
The human body is holy. Holy means sacred.
>>correct
A famous American poet, Walt Whitman says If anything is sacred the human body is sacred.
>> A famous American poet, Walt Whitman said, \"If anything is sacred the human body is sacred.\"
The government designated on May 6 as temporary holiday.
>> The government designated May 6 as a temporary holiday.
We have a four-day weekend this weekend. The first day of a four-day weekend, Today(May 5) is Children\'s day.
>>correct
OR>> We have a long weekend this week. The first day of the four-day weekend is today (May 5) which is Children\'s day.
My sons is all adult. I have two sons.
>> My sons are all adult. I have two sons.
OR>> I have two sons. They are both adults.
My eldest son is junior at Yeonsei University.
>> My eldest son is a junior at Yeonsei University.
Younger son is in the military services.
>> My younger son is in the military.
OR>> My youngest son is doing his military service.
Last year he completed the first semester of his sophomore year at Korea university. He will finish the military duty next year.
>>Last year, he completed the first semester of his sophomore year at Korea University. He will finish his military duty next year.
After that, he will go back to school.
>>correct
And so, I spend a time with my wife.
>>And so, I spend time with my wife.
For eat out, for buy a book, for walk a cheonggyecheon.
>>We either eat out, buy a book or take a walk at Cheonggyecheon.
May 6, my younger son comes on military leave.
>>On May 6, my younger son comes home on military leave.
OR>> This Friday, my younger son is on military leave so he\'ll come home.
I am going out to eat a lunch with him and my family.
>>I am going out to eat lunch with him and my family.
OR>> Our family will eat out for lunch.
And I will spend a time for a reading a books, and take a sauna, and so on.
>>And I will also spend time reading books, go to the sauna and so on.
Anyway holiday is very delightful for me, for family, for all.
>>Anyway, holiday is very delightful for me, my family and to all.
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