Holiday
학생이 쓴 원문
I spent great time with family and friends.
Fortunately, the weather was fine. I could see a whole moon.
Actually, most Korean wemen suffer from preparing food for ancestor on Chuseok.
But I don't have to help mommy because I'm pregnant now.
But I already worry about next holiday.
Because I hate cooking and setting table.
That's very hard and unfair. Most men is just looking that wemen is working.
So wemen don't like holiday. I think it must be chaged as soon as possible.
강사 첨삭
Welcome back Ma'am Amy! What a delight to see you here in this site! I had a wonderful time reading your thoughts about your holiday. However, I feel your burden and I totally understand your point why we women are coupled with those chores and tasks when there could be equity between men and women at home.
Well, as you said it, it must change as soon as possible and so we ought to make them realize that along with enjoyment comes effort to share labor for happier and more memorable holidays to come.
Anyway, good luck with your next holiday, I wish you the best.
I spent great time with family and friends.>> I spent a great time with my family and friends.Fortunately, the weather was fine. I could see a whole moon.
>> Fortunately, the weather was fine. I could see the whole moon./ I could see the full moon.Actually, most Korean wemen suffer from preparing food for ancestor on Chuseok.
>> Actually, most Korean women suffer from preparing food for the ancestors on Chuseok.But I don't have to help mommy because I'm pregnant now.>> But I don't have to help Mommy because I'm pregnant now.But I already worry about next holiday.>> But I'm already worried about the next holiday.Because I hate cooking and setting table.
>> I hate cooking and setting the table.That's very hard and unfair. Most men is just looking that wemen is working.
>> It's very hard and unfair. Most men are just looking at women who are working.So wemen don't like holiday. I think it must be chaged as soon as possible.
>> So women don't like holidays. I think it must be changed as soon as possible.
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