Holidays!

2015-12-15 · 첨삭 강사 Jeny

학생이 쓴 원문

There are very long holidays, four holidays! I'm excited about how I should spend the long holidays. Of course, I need to finish my tests tommorow first. I'm a little nervous. I prepared for tommorow's test but I worry if I can do well as I did. Oh god... Anyway, have good holidays, Jeny. :D <Homework> Educated people need to have a responsibility for improving our life properly. There are still so many people that don't observe the life's rules, of course including us. We know how we should behave in society. But we often ignore them for our comfortability. If observing them, we could enhance our life quality. We need to have flexibility as well.

강사 첨삭

Hello [이름],

I hope that you can pass the important exam of yours.

It would be a long holiday for both of us and I wish we can spend it wisely.

Have a great time!!!

Thank you for expressing your opinion on you essay!!!

Talk to you son!!!

T. Jeny

 

There are very long holidays, four holidays!
>>It would be a long four days holiday.

I\'m excited about how I should spend the long holidays.

>>I\'m excited about how I should spend the long holiday.

Of course, I need to finish my tests tommorow first.

>>Of course, I need to finish first my tests tommorow.

>>Of course, I need to finish my tests first.

I\'m a little nervous.

>>correct

I prepared for tommorow\'s test but I worry if I can do well as I did. Oh god...
>>I prepared for tommorow\'s test but I am worried if I can do well.

Anyway, have good holidays, Jeny. :D

>>Anyway, have a good holiday, Jeny.

<Homework>
Educated people need to have a responsibility for improving our life properly.

>>Educated people need to have responsibilities in improving their lives properly.

There are still so many people that don\'t observe life\'s rules, including us.

>>There are still so many people who don\'t observe the life\'s rules, of course including us.

We know how we should behave in society.

>>We should know how to behave in society.

But we often ignore them for our comfortability.

>>But we often ignore it because we are too comfortable with our lives.

If observing them, we could enhance our life quality.
>>If we only observe them, then we could enhance the quality of life we have.

We need to have flexibility as well.

>>We need to be flexible as well.

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