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Good morning Ma\'am [이름]!~
Thank you for your effort in answering my question. You know what, it is also my dream to put up a bar and a coffee shop. But it will be a dream only. Anyway, I hope that you could fulfill your dream to have your own bar someday. don\'t forget to invite on the opening day of you bar. They say that nothing is impossible if you believe.^^ Happy Friday and be safe and warm~
~Kelly^^
Describe the job/career you hope to have and explain why you are interested to have this job.
It will be funny that I want to have another job for my future.
>> It is funny that I want to have another job for my future.
But If it\'s possible I want to have another jobs.
>> But If it\'s possible I want to have another job.
>> But If it\'s possible I want to have other jobs.
Working in Real estate market and running a Bar.
>> Correct.
I am very interested in real estate.
>> Correct.
I mean, buying and selling houses, buildings and land.
>> I mean, buying and selling houses, buildings and lands.
I want to study and have a license for real estate someday.
>> I want to study and have a license in real estate someday.
I think I can work in real estate regardless of age.
>> Correct.
I can make money as long as I can walk and talk.
>> Correct.
That\'s why I want to learn real estate for my old age.
>> Correct.
And I want to run a bar.
>> Correct.
I know what people need and want when they drink.
>> Correct.
I\'ve heard many bars go bankrupt recently.
>> Correct.
So, I am just thinking about opening a bar.
>> Correct.
But If I have surplus money and time, I am going to open a bar in my place.
>> But If I have surplus money and time, I am going to open a bar in my place.
>> Correct.
Hi~~ Kelly~~
>> Correct.
If I open a bar, I will give you free drink ticket. kkkk
>> If I open a bar, I will give you a free drink ticket. kkkk
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