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2015-11-10 · 첨삭 강사 Rose

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Do you agree that vacation enhances performance? I totally agree with that because people need a rest. People can charge energy after taking a rest. People can enhance their performance after they charge energy. People can take a rest and charge energy during vacation. This is the reason why I agree that vacation enhances performance.

강사 첨삭

I agree with you too, Mr. [이름]on!
How about you?
How often do you take a rest?
Do you agree that vacation enhances performance?
I totally agree with that because people need a rest.
>>CORRECT!
People can charge energy after taking a rest.
>>People can charge energy after taking a vacation.
People can enhance their performance after they charge energy.
>>They can enhance their performance after having their energy recharged.
People can take a rest and charge energy during vacation.
>>Therefore, people an take a rest and charge energy during vacation.
This is the reason why I agree that vacation enhances performance.
>>CORRECT!

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