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Have you ever been interested in space exploration?
I was interested about space, but not much these days. It was really fantastic when I was young. Because, space is very big and there are many beautiful stars too. And are solar system was the most interested thing. But I know all of them, and it is not fun or fantastic then I was young.
Is space exploration dangerous? Yes, or No, and Why?
Yes. Because, it\'s the place that has no oxygen and gravity. It\'s very large too. And we don\'t know what is out there.
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Hi [이름] Ju,
Human space exploration helps to address fundamental questions about our place in the Universe and the history of our solar system. By addressing the challenges related to human space exploration we expand technology, create new industries, and help to foster a peaceful connection with other nations. And the major health hazards of spaceflight include higher levels of damaging radiation, altered gravity fields, long periods of isolation and confinement, a closed and potentially hostile living environment, and the stress associated with being a long distance from mother Earth. ~ Teacher QUENNY..
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Have you ever been interested in space exploration?
>> Have you ever been interested in space exploration?(Correct)
I was interested about space, but not much these days.
>> I became interested in space exploration when I was still young but not that much now.
It was really fantastic when I was young. Because, space is very big and there are many beautiful stars too.
>> I was really amazed when I was young because space is very huge and there are many beautiful stars and other terrestrial bodies too.
And are solar system was the most interested thing. But I know all of them, and it is not fun or fantastic then I was young.
>> And the Solar System was the most interesting thing for me but I learned all of them, and it is not fun or amazing to learn about Solar System when I was young.
Is space exploration dangerous? Yes, or No, and Why?
>>Is space exploration dangerous? Yes, or No, and Why? (Correct)
Yes. Because, it\'s the place that has no oxygen and gravity. It\'s very large too. And we don\'t know what is out there.
>> Yes, it\'s dangerous because it\'s a place that has no oxygen and gravity, and it\'s very huge too as well as we don\'t know what is out there.
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Have you ever been interested in space exploration?
I was interested about space, but not much these days. It was really fantastic when I was young. Because, space is very big and there are many beautiful stars too. And are solar system was the most interested thing. But I know all of them, and it is not fun or fantastic then I was young.
Is space exploration dangerous? Yes, or No, and Why?
Yes. Because, it\'s the place that has no oxygen and gravity. It\'s very large too. And we don\'t know what is out there.
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