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Yes because birthday is only once a year for children, that’s special day. So parents need to make happy their children like giving a present
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Hi Henry,
Gift-giving builds empathy and a gift can be a way to communicate love or affection. Parents should give gifts to their children as a way of showing thoughtfulness, love, and affection. Parents should encourage their kids to recognize how fortunate they are to receive gifts. Parents also should encourage their kids to recognize how fortunate they are to receive gifts. Their confidence is given a boost as well when they watch the receiver open the gift. ~ Teacher QUENNY^^
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Yes because birthday is only once a year for children, that’s special day. So parents need to make happy their children like giving a present.
>>Yes, because a birthday is only once a year for children, that’s a special day. So parents need to make happy their children by giving them a present.
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Yes because birthday is only once a year for children, that’s special day. So parents need to make happy their children like giving a present
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