home work
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Technology is improving our education. For example invent of paper, pencil and, electronic devices are making that we can make a books, write something, and can education on online.As a result Technology always improve our education
강사 첨삭
Hi Justin!
Thank you for your effort today.
I think you\'re experimenting with some expressions.
This is really good practice.
Your sentences have definitely improved.
I hope you keep this up.^^
~~ Teacher Sharon
Technology is improving our education.
>> Correct
For example invent of paper, pencil and, electronic devices are making that we can make a books, write something, and can education on online.
>> For example, we have invented paper, pencil and electronic devices that can write books and provide education online.
>> For example, we have invented paper, pencil and electronic devices that can write books and provide education online.
As a result Technology always improve our education.
>> As a result, technology always improves our education.
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