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I want to run a store that sells music, because I love music
these days most people download and listen to music,
but in the past, most people bought Music CD,
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Hi, Ivan!
I love that you shared your passion for music and connected it to your dream! Your comparison between past and present shows that you understand how things have changed. Next time, you could add an example of your favorite CD or artist to make your answer even more personal. Great work!
~Teacher Polly
>>I want to run a store that sells music because I love it.
these days most people download and listen to music,
but in the past, most people bought Music CD,
>>These days, most people download and listen to music, but in the past, most people bought music CDs.
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