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I would like to try archery because Korea is good at archery so i want to try it. I think it will be difficult. Ali baba and the forty thieves. In Pesia there lived Ali baba and Kassim. One day, they're father died and Kassim disperse Ali baba. Ali baba goes to mountain. He saw amazing sight. Forty thieves came to cave and said "Open, sesame." and in cave there was a lot of treasure. So Ali baba stole treasure and become to rich. Ali baba's brother, Kassim heard about Ali baba. So he visited Ali baba's house. Ali baba told about cave and forty thieves. Soon Kassim went to cave and take treasures. Unfortunately he forgot the spell so he can't go back home. Then forty thieves come and they found Kassim and kill him. And they notice that Ali baba stole treasure too. So one of them found Ali baba's house and draw x on his door but Ali baba's maid draw x on every door in town and kill forty thieves. So maid and Ali baba married and lived happily.

Hi [이름]! I would love to try archery too! I watched the drama \'Jumong\' and that\'s when I started getting interested in archery. ^^ But you are right, it would be very difficult since the bow is too heavy.  Great story you have here. I just noticed that you still need to review proper capitalization and punctuation. Be consistent in your sentences too. There should be parallelism in your sentences. Remember the verb tenses too. Don\'t get confused with they\'re and their okay?  Keep it up! CIAO! ~Teacher Marie~ I would like to try archery because Korea is good at archery so i want to try it. >> CORRECT OR >> Koreans are good at archery so I would like to try it too. - better I think it will be difficult. >> CORRECT OR >> I think it will be difficult though.Ali baba and the forty thieves. >> \"Ali Baba and the Forty Thieves\".In Pesia there lived Ali baba and Kassim. >> CORRECT *Persia ^^ One day, they\'re father died and Kassim disperse Ali baba. >> One day, their father died and Kassim got rid of Ali Baba. Ali baba goes to mountain. >> Ali Baba went to the mountains. He saw amazing sight. >> He saw an amazing sight. OR >> He saw something amazing.Forty thieves came to cave and said \"Open, sesame.\" >> Forty thieves came in front of a cave and said \'open sesame\'. and in cave there was a lot of treasure. >> There were a lot of treasures in the cave. So Ali baba stole treasure and become to rich. >> So Ali Baba stole the treasure and became rich.Ali baba\'s brother, Kassim, heard about Ali baba. >> CORRECT So he visited Ali baba\'s house. >> CORRECTAli baba told about cave and forty thieves. >> Ali Baba told him about the cave and the forty thieves.Soon Kassim went to cave and take treasures. >> Soon Kassim went to the cave to take the treasures for himself. Unfortunately he forgot the spell so he can\'t go back home. >> CORRECT Then forty thieves come and they found Kassim and kill him. >> The forty thieves came. They found Kassim inside the cave and killed him. And they notice that Ali baba stole treasure too. >> They found out that Ali Baba stole their treasure too.So one of them found Ali baba\'s house and draw x on his door, but Ali baba\'s maid draw x on every door in town and they killed the forty thieves. >> CORRECT So maid and Ali baba married and lived happily. >> The maid and Ali Baba got married and lived happily ever after.