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Q. Have you ever wanted something so badly that you would do anything to get it? How did you feel after you received or attained the thing that you desired? Did it make your life happier or more miserable? Tell about such an experience.
A. When I was an elementry school student, I really wanted to buy a toy such as robot which was shown on TV animation program. My parent said that they would buy a toy for me if I got a high score at the exam.
So, I sincerely studied hard for all of subjects and then I got a high score at the examination finally. My parent were very happy and they bought a toy for me.
After that time, I realized a fun of studying. It makes my life better and gives me a kind of happiness when I get a sense of achievement.
강사 첨삭
Hi there,:))
What a MARVELOUS WEDNESDAY to you!
First of all, I would like to say thank you for this day.
You did a fine job today.
I really appreciate your cooperation and dedication in learning the English language.
You really had an interesting childhood.
Imagine, not all elementary students would do the same thing for the sake of toys.:))
Anyway, thank you very much for sharing your experience.
See you tomorrow!:))
~T. Glenda~
Q. Have you ever wanted something so badly that you would do anything to get it? How did you feel after you received or attained the thing that you desired? Did it make your life happier or more miserable? Tell about such an experience. A. When I was an elementry school student, I really wanted to buy a toy such as robot which was shown on TV animation program. My parent said that they would buy a toy for me if I got a high score at the exam.
>>correctSo, I sincerely studied hard for all of subjects and then I got a high score at the examination finally.
>>So, I sincerely studied hard in all subjects and I finally got a high score in the examination.
My parents were very happy and they bought a toy for me.>>correctAfter that time, I realized a fun of studying.
>>After that time, I realized the fun in studying.
It makes my life better and gives me a kind of happiness when I get a sense of achievement. >>correct
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