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Topic : what is your understanding of this saying:"Money is a good servant, but a bad master."
I grasp the saying indicates people should be able to control using of money and don't be dominated by money. Money give a great many convenience to people. People can buy their cars, foods and houses by money. In addition, the amount of money can change a sort of cars, foods and houses. For this advantage, people effort to earn more money.
On the other hand, if everyone has abundant money, that's icing on the cake. However, the amount of money is limited. So, some people have huge money and some people are poor and couldn't get out of their poverity in their life. Furthermore, the rich continously try to increase their wealth and the poor become extremely scarce. For those reasons, to make more money, some people commit a crime or extort others.
Consequently, if we can properly adjust the distribution of wealth, money will become a good servant. Otherwise, we will become a slave of money.
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Hello William!
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I grasp the saying indicates people should be able to control using of money and don\'t be dominated by money.
>>I grasp the saying indicates people should be able to control using of money and should not be dominated by money.
Money give a great many convenience to people.
>> Money gives convenience to people.
People can buy their cars, foods and houses by money.
>>Correct!
In addition, the amount of money can change a sort of cars, foods and houses.
>>In addition, the amount of money can change all sorts of cars, foods and houses.
For this advantage, people effort to earn more money.
>>For this advantage, people put much effort in earning more money.On the other hand, if everyone has abundant money, that\'s icing on the cake.
>>Correct! :)
However, the amount of money is limited.
>>Correct!
So, some people have huge money and some people are poor and couldn\'t get out of their poverty in their life.
>>So, some people have huge money and some people are poor and couldn\'t get out of povery.
Furthermore, the rich continously try to increase their wealth and the poor become extremely scarce.
>>Correct!
For those reasons, to make more money, some people commit a crime or extort others.
>>For those reasons, to make more money, some people commit crimes or extort others.
Consequently, if we can properly adjust the distribution of wealth, money will become a good servant.
>>Correct!
Otherwise, we will become a slave of money.
>>Otherwise, we will becomes of money.
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