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2013-07-24 · 첨삭 강사 Lorraine

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"The globalization of Korean traditional food". That was the catch phrase of last the Lee Myung-back administration. To do so, the Lee administration dumped huge money which is a tax paid by the Korean people. Nowdays, the Korean people question how the project is efficient and the project is really necessary. I also believe that the globalization of Korean traditional foods is sincerely not needed. There are two apparant reasons. First, a traditional food become the country's unique food till it is in it's country. Second, there are no financial benefits to do the globalization of foods. We already spent a lot of money to achieve the project as well as we didn't success to inform our foods to the world. In conclusion, these facts let us know that not only we need to maintain and success taste of our particular foods continuously but it's also authentic the globalization when our traditional foods confidently show foreignres visiting Korea.

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Hello William! :) Frankly speaking, your answer surprised me. :) And it made me proud of you because it shows how important tradition and culture is for you. Not many people in the world would carry such value. See you in class and take care! ~Teacher Lorraine~ That was the catch phrase of last the Lee Myung-back administration. >>That was the catch phrase of the former administration--Lee Myung administration.  To do so, the Lee administration dumped huge money which is a tax paid by the Korean people.>>To do so, the Lee administration dumped huge money from the taxes paid by the Korean people.Nowdays, the Korean people question how the project is efficient and the project is really necessary. >>Nowadays, the Korean people question how efficient the project is and if it is really necessary.  I also believe that the globalization of Korean traditional foods is sincerely not needed.>>Correct! There are two apparant reasons. >> Correct!  [Spelling check: apparant should be apparent]First, a traditional food become the country\'s unique food till it is in it\'s country.>>First, a traditional food stays unique until it is out of the country.Second, there are no financial benefits to do the globalization of foods. >>Correct! We already spent a lot of money to achieve the project as well as we didn\'t success to inform our foods to the world.>>We already spent a lot of money to achieve the project, however, we didn\'t succeed to introduce our foods to the world.In conclusion, these facts let us know that not only we need to maintain and success taste of our particular foods continuously but it\'s also authentic the globalization when our traditional foods confidently show foreignres visiting Korea. >>In conclusion, these facts let us know that not only do we need to maintain the taste of our traditional foods but also, authentic globalization of these foods is done by confidently showing them to foreigners visiting Korea.

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