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2013-07-29 · 첨삭 강사 Lorraine

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If someone get rid of books in people's life, how many people feel uncomfortable? Lots of people in the world would never read a book for a year. In this situation, some people may have a question that books are really requisite. I think the answer is "Yes". The more cultures have developed, the more books are needed. This is because books have a role of recording history. We can understand the life of past and transport the present of life to the future thanks to books. While another types of reserving systems such as electronic books is emerging thesedays, those are also adopting a form of a book. Moreover, books connect the thoughts of people living together in present. Through books, people can know other's notions, can share and can maintain. Therefore, we can't remain our history and will loose the means of carrying our thoughts without books.

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A great Monday to you, William! ^^ Thank you for diligently making and sending in your homeworks. ^^ You\'re right. From the moment writing was \"invented\" by man, it has become a medium in communicating to with future generations and vice versa. For example, Ebers Papyrus, a collection of the ancient Egyptian medical treaties, has been used in the development of modern medicine. Thank you for sharing your thoughts. ^^ See you in class! ~Teacher Lorraine! If someone get rid of books in people\'s life, how many people feel uncomfortable? >>If someone gets rid of books in people\'s lives, how many people would feel uncomfortable? Lots of people in the world would never read a book for a year. >>Correct! In this situation, some people may have a question that books are really requisite. >>In this situation, some people may have questions if books are really requisite. I think the answer is \"Yes\". >>Correct!The more cultures have developed, the more books are needed. >>The more developed a culture is, the more books are needed. This is because books have a role of recording history. >>Correct! We can understand the life of past and transport the present of life to the future thanks to books. >>We can understand life in the past and put the present in books. While another types of reserving systems such as electronic books is emerging thesedays, those are also adopting a form of a book. >>While there are other types of recording systems such as electronic books are emerging these days, those are also adopting the form of a book. Moreover, books connect the thoughts of people living together in present. >>Moreover, books connect the thoughts of people living together in the present. Through books, people can know other\'s notions, can share and can maintain.>>Through books, people can know other\'s notions, can share and can maintain them.Therefore, we can\'t remain our history and will loose the means of carrying our thoughts without books. >>Therefore, we cannot maintain our history and will loose the means recording our thoughts without books.

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