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I will mention my memorable experience related music rather than my best experience about music. When I was a 21 years old, before I enlisted in Korea army, I hade made a girl friend.
Unlike armies of other countries, the military service is essential for man in Korea and there are a lot of restrictions at their military life. For example, regular holidays are really infrequent and early enlisted soilders cann't use phone. The only way I was able to meet my girl freind is to watch her picture before sleeping.
One day, after finishing fire trainning, while we were resting for a moment, a music flowed from somewhere. The title of the song is "between friendship and love" and it's meaning is a suggestion of the breakup between lovers. When I heard the song, I anticipated our separation. After all, as I expected, I separated from her for my first holidays.
However, for a long time, whenever I hear the song from somewhere, I used to recall my first love.
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Hi there^^
Oh wow... What a very good composition you
made today. I think everyone would always
remember their first love but do you believe in the
saying \" First Love Never Dies?\"
That\'s just a thought for you to think about^^
See you in class!
~T.Lorraine~
I will mention my memorable experience related music rather than my best experience about music.
>> Correct
When I was a 21 years old, before I enlisted in Korea army, I hade made a girl friend.
>> Correct >> before I enlisted in the Korean Army, I had a girl friend.Unlike armies of other countries, the military service is essential for man in Korea and there are a lot of restrictions at their military life.
>> Unlike other armies of other countries, the military service is essential for a man in Korea but there are a lot of restricitions with regards to their military life.
For example, regular holidays are really infrequent and early enlisted soilders cann\'t use phone.
>> Correct >>soldiers can\'t use the phone.
The only way I was able to meet my girl freind is to watch her picture before sleeping.
>> Correct >>friendOne day, after finishing fire trainning, while we were resting for a moment, a music flowed from somewhere.
>> Correct >> a music was played from somewhere.
The title of the song is \"between friendship and love\" and it\'s meaning is a suggestion of the breakup between lovers.
>> Correct
When I heard the song, I anticipated our separation.
>> Correct
After all, as I expected, I separated from her for my first holidays.>> Correct >>on my first holiday.However, for a long time, whenever I hear the song from somewhere, I used to recall my first love.
>> Correct
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