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Today's topic is significantly difficult. This is because there have been a lot of ways of living in Korea and individual ways have been affecting Korea's economy in their parts. However, the ways of living overall can be divided into two ways, employees or employer. First, when it comes to employees, they also could be distinguished to a regular worker and a temporary worker. There are immense conflicts to become regular workers since the regular jobs are not abundant and provide them plentiful pay, whereas most of Korean are working to temporary workers and are suffring from deficient salary. Second, the 30 percentage of Korean population are self-employed and they usually operate a small business. They also suffer from their small income. Unfortunately, most of Korean are working hard and encompass by harsh surroundings because of failed wealth distribution policy. To make Korean well-being, Korean government first desolve the problem of wealth distribution.

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Though you mentioned that it\'s difficult, you still gave a very comprehensive answer.

So I commend you for that.
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Today\'s topic is significantly difficult. 

>> CORRECT

This is because there have been a lot of ways of living in Korea and individual ways have been affecting Korea\'s economy in their parts.

>> CORRECT
>> OR: Do you mean: This is because there are a lot of ways of living in Korea and also the individual ways have their own part in affecting Korea\'s economy. 

However, the ways of living overall can be divided into two ways, employees or employer.

>> However, the overall ways of living can be divided into two ways between the employees and the employer. 

First, when it comes to employees, they also could be distinguished to a regular worker and a temporary worker.

>> CORRECT

There are immense conflicts to become regular workers since the regular jobs are not abundant and provide them plentiful pay, whereas most of Korean are working to temporary workers and are suffring from deficient salary.

>> There are immense conflicts to become regulars workers since the regular jobs are not abundant to provide them some plentiful/abundant payment, whereas most Koreans are working as temporary workers and they are suffering from deficient salary. 

Second, the 30 percentage of Korean population are self-employed and they usually operate a small business.

>> Second, 30 percent of the Korean population are self-employed  and they usually operate small business. 

>> OR: ..... and they are usually operating small businesses. 

They also suffer from their small income.

>> CORRECT

Unfortunately, most of Korean are working hard and encompass by harsh surroundings because of failed wealth distribution policy.

>> Unfortunately, most Koreans are working hard and being encompassed by the harsh environment because of the failure to follow the wealth distribution policy. 

To make Korean well-being, Korean government first desolve the problem of wealth distribution.

>> To make Koreans as good well-beings, the government should first eradicate the problem in wealth distribution.