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2013-08-28 · 첨삭 강사 Jane

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What can you say about divorce? Recently, parents' divorce has caused serious social problems about their children. Since childhood is the very sensitive period, parents should take care of well their children and should have an efforts to provide good surroundings. Thus, dovorce of parents causes a bad influence to their children both physical and psychological aspects. To reduce the increasing number of divorce, what should people do? I think when people determine their wife/husband, they should more contemplate. In addition, if they would married, they should strive to keep their own family. This is because they have a responsibility for their decisions and a marriage is a kind of pledge to keep their promise each other. Although, divorce may be a alternative to parents, it is the worst choice to their children.

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Hi there! Thank you for your composition today! You did a great job in writing your thoughts about the subject matter. Keep it up! Take care and have a wonderful day! T. Hannah What can you say about divorce?>> CorrectRecently, parents\' divorce has caused serious social problems about their children. >> Recently, divorced parents have caused serious social problems to children. Since childhood is the very sensitive period, parents should take care of well their children and should have an efforts to provide good surroundings.>> Since childhood is a very sensitive period, parents should take care of their children\'s wellnessand should make an effort to provide good atmosphere. Thus, dovorce of parents causes a bad influence to their children both physical and psychological aspects.>> Divorce causes bad physical and psychological effects to children.To reduce the increasing number of divorce, what should people do?>> To lessen the rate of divorce, what should people do? I think when people determine their wife/husband, they should more contemplate. >> When people choose their wife/husband, they should contemplate more. In addition, if they would married, they should strive to keep their own family. >> In addition, if they are married, they should strive to keep their family. This is because they have a responsibility for their decisions and a marriage is a kind of pledge to keep their promise each other.>> This is because they are responsible for their decisions, and marriage is a kind of pledge to keep their promise to each other.Although, divorce may be a alternative to parents, it is the worst choice to their children. >> Although divorce may be an alternative to parents, it is the worst choice on the part of the childrenm

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