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What can you say about the differences Korean between men and women?
As the era is changed, women's social position is raised in Korea. On the contrary, women's power is bigger than men's thesedays. Unfortunately, the places where men can stand become disappeared.
I think this phenomena arise from increasing the gap between the rich and the poor as well as the decline of the middle class. In the past, my father's period, men could support their family with their work. However, in contemporary times, only men's income cann't maintain family's life since prices have rised significantly. So, women's participation about economic activity is increasing continuously and men's social position is dropping down.
I believe contemporary men are really pitiful since they are suffering from laborious work as well as social treatment about men become worsen.
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What can you say about the differences Korean between men and women?As the era is changed, women\'s social position is raised in Korea.
>>Correct!
OR>>With the continuous changes happening around us, women\'s social position increased here in Korea.
On the contrary, women\'s power is bigger than men\'s thesedays.
>>Correct!
Unfortunately, the places where men can stand become disappeared.
>>Unfortunately, the positions men usually are in is slowly disappearing.
I think this phenomena arise from increasing the gap between the rich and the poor as well as the decline of the middle class.
>>Unfortunately, the positions men usually are in is slowly disappearing.
I think this phenomena arise from increasing the gap between the rich and the poor as well as the decline of the middle class.
>>Correct!
OR>>I think this happened with the gap between the rich and the poor as well as the decline of the middle class.
In the past, my father\'s period, men could support their family with their work.
>>Correct!
However, in contemporary times, only men\'s income cann\'t maintain family\'s life since prices have rised significantly.
>>However, this contemporary times, men\'s cannot is not sufficient anymore since prices are increasing significantly.
So, women\'s participation about economic activity is increasing continuously and men\'s social position is dropping down.
>>Correct!
I believe contemporary men are really pitiful since they are suffering from laborious work as well as social treatment about men become worsen.
>>Correct!
I believe contemporary men are really pitiful since they are suffering from laborious work as well as social treatment about men become worsen.
>>Correct! OR>>I believe that men nowadays are pitiful since they suffer much from social degradation and all.
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