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Give advantages and disadvantages of being a hardworker.
Are there any advantages of being a hardworker? I think nothing. On the contrary, being a hardworker has a lot of disadvantages.
First of all, they will loose their health due to their works. Most people would do their works to be happy or to get a better life and better future, but if their works are harmful to their health, it is really ironic.
Moreover, during pursuing their works, their relationship will decrease. The relationship with family and friends is also essential for better life.
Overall, being a hardworker contains many disadvantages. Nonetheless, most Korean are still working regardless of their intention, unfortunately. Therefore, Korea needs new labor policy which allow people's welfare and happiness.
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Hi there Mr. [Name]!
Happy Monday to you.
I hope you are enjoying your work.kk
I know you are a hardworker. kk
Ofcourse you are!
See you very soon!
~t. Hannah~
Give advantages and disadvantages of being a hardworker.Are there any advantages of being a hardworker?
>>Correct!
I think nothing.
>>Correct!
OR>>I think there\'s none.
On the contrary, being a hardworker has a lot of disadvantages.>>Correct!First of all, they will loose their health due to their works.
>>Correct!
Most people would do their works to be happy or to get a better life and better future, but if their works are harmful to their health, it is really ironic.>>Correct!Moreover, during pursuing their works, their relationship will decrease.
>>Correct!
or>>Moreover, while having their work, their relationships with other people are slowly decreasing.
The relationship with family and friends is also essential for better life.>>Correct!
OR>>The relationship with family members and friends is alos needed to have a better life.Overall, being a hardworker contains many disadvantages.
>>Correct!
Nonetheless, most Korean are still working regardless of their intention, unfortunately.
>>Correct!
Therefore, Korea needs new labor policy which allow people\'s welfare and happiness.
>>Correct!
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