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I don\'t ask about mobile phone number to people I just met.
First reason is that if I and someone give and take mobile phone number, we connect to Kakao talk each other automatically which is the most famous chatting app in Korea. Then we can see their profile photos. People usulally use private pictures in profile photos. So, I don\'t want to let people who I am not familir with know. Also, many people may do that.
Secondly, Mobile number may be used for abuse such as spill personal information or hacking. When I worked for Netherlands company, they don\'t indicate mobile number in business card or e-mail signature. However, mobile umber is essencial in businees card in Korea. I heard they think mobile number is important personal information.
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I don\'t ask about mobile phone number to people I just met.>> I don\'t ask for someone\'s mobile phone number especially at the first meeting.
First reason is that if I and someone give and take mobile phone number, we connect to Kakao talk each other automatically which is the most famous chatting app in Korea.
First reason is that if I and someone give and take mobile phone number, we connect to Kakao talk each other automatically which is the most famous chatting app in Korea.
>> The first reason is that if we exchange our mobile phone numbers, we will be automatically be connected to our Kakaotalk accounts, which is the most famous chatting app in Korea.
Then we can see their profile photos.
>> CORRECT
OR Then, we can see each other\'s profile photos.
People usulally use private pictures in profile photos.
>> People usually use private pictures as their profile.
So, I don\'t want to let people who I am not familir with know.
>> So, I don\'t want to let people, who I am not familiar with, see it.
Also, many people may do that.
>> CORRECT
Secondly, Mobile number may be used for abuse such as spill personal information or hacking.
Secondly, Mobile number may be used for abuse such as spill personal information or hacking.
>> Secondly, mobile numbers may be used for illegal activities such as spilling personal information or hacking.
When I worked for Netherlands company, they don\'t indicate mobile number in business card or e-mail signature.
>> When I worked for a Dutch company, they don\'t indicate mobile numbers on their business cards or e-mail signatures.
However, mobile umber is essencial in businees card in Korea.
>> However, mobile numbers are essential on business cards in Korea.
I heard they think mobile number is important personal information.
>> I heard they think mobile numbers are important personal information.
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