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What\'s the best age to move out on your own?

I think the best age to move out is decided whether he or she hold a qualification to earn his or her living or not.

>> I think the best age to move out is to decide whether he or she hold the qualification to earn for his or her living or not. 

The qualification means economic situation such as regular salary, cash in possession and so on.

>> The qualification means economic situation such as having a regular salary, cash possession and so on.

In Korea, Moving-out can be started around age 24 for women that is one year after graduation from university and also one year passed from joining a company generally.

>> In Korea, you can move out at the age of 24 for women, that is one year after graduation from university and also after a year if you were employed in a company.

For man, It can be age 27 because they spend 2 or 3 years for military service.

>> For men, at the age of 27 because they spent 2 or 3 years for military service.

But These days, economic condition is bad and follow the tradition of large family, there is many young people live their parents like me.

>> But theses days, the economy is in a bad condition and we need to follow the tradition of a large family. There are many young people that live with their parents like me.^^