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2014-03-03 · 첨삭 강사 Liza

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Does education guarantee a good job? Why? Yes, education guarantee a good job in Korea. Because people think that education is very important to live like a earning money, a living comfortable life, getting a good job. So all student study hard to enter university in Korea.

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Hello there^^

Good evening.

I totally agree with your ideas here.

Thanks for sharing me your thoughts.

Good job. However, be mindful with your grammar and punctuation marks.

I hope that you will take my advice. See you in class.

T. Chelsea


Does education guarantee a good job? Why?

Yes, education guarantee a good job in Korea.

>>BETTER: Yes, having a good education background guarantees a good job in Korea.
 Because people think that education is very important to live

>> Because people thing that education is very important in our life.
 like a earning money, a living comfortable life, getting a good job.

>> It is as important as earning money, living in a comfortable life and getting a good job.
 So all student study hard to enter university in Korea.

>> So all student are studying hard to enter the universities of Korea.

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