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2014-08-01 · 첨삭 강사 Kathrine

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Young is a workaholic person, and they should be. It will guarantee him a happy elderly life. But, the work isn't worth losing my present personal life & time. We should not take a mistake to devote my young for the happy elderly life, because life is only one time & young is much more valuable. Every moment is valuable. So, I do not spend even a moment, stupidly. For example, although I am in a very new place with new people, I am trying to enjoy the moment. On my way back home, I do not want to regret, why I just sit on a chair. I would have enjoyed that time, happily. When I become fiftish, I do not want to regret to my past. So I hope to do my best in every moment. 'Only work makes Jack a dull boy.' My goal is not to arrive at the final line, as fast as I can. I want to enjoy & take a look around my whole way, till I arrive. I am trying my best when I am working and when I finish it, I will just focus on my personal time.

강사 첨삭

Hello again Mr. [이름]!

Thanks for clarifying the things that you want to say about our topic yesterday.

And I just totally agree with the things that you have said.

We should just enjoy the moment at present.

We only live once so we must live to the fullest.

Though we are working, we still have to have our personal time.

When we are working, we have to do our best. But if it is the time to take a break, then we have to take a break and enjoy our personal time.

We do not have to rush and work and work and work and in the end, we regret that we did not enjoy the things that we want to do when we were still young.

So I do hope that you still have a lot of plans for your personal time Mr. [이름].

Enjoy being a bachelor and do things that you want to do on your personal time.
Thanks for sharing your thoughts!! :p)


Always,

Kathrine ^^


Young is a workaholic person, and they should be.

>>  Young is a workaholic person, and he should be.

It will guarantee him a happy elderly life.

>>  correct!

>> or: It will guarantee him a happy life when he gets older.

But, the work isn\'t worth losing my present personal life & time.

>>  correct!

We should not take a mistake to devote my young for the happy elderly life, because life is only one time & young is much more valuable.

>>  We should not make a mistake in devoting our present life for a happy elderly life, because our life is only once and being young is more valuable.
 Every moment is valuable.

>>  correct!

So, I do not spend even a moment, stupidly.

>>  correct!

For example, although I am in a very new place with new people, I am trying to enjoy the moment.

>>  correct!

>> or; For example, although I am in a new environment surrounded by new people, I am still trying to enjoy every moment.

On my way back home, I do not want to regret, why I just sit on a chair.

>>  correct!

>> or; On my way back home, I do not want to regret the moment where I was just sitting on a chair.

I would have enjoyed that time, happily.

>>  correct!
 When I become fiftish, I do not want to regret to my past.

>>  When I reach the age of fifty, I don\'t want to regret things about my past.

 So I hope to do my best in every moment.

>> correct!

>> or: So I am hoping that I will do my

\'Only work makes Jack a dull boy.\'

>>  correct!  

>> All work and no play makes Jack a dull boy
 My goal is not to arrive at the final line, as fast as I can.

>>  correct!

I want to enjoy & take a look around my whole way, till I arrive. 

>>  I want to enjoy and take a look around during my journey until I arrive in my destination.
 I am trying my best when I am working and when I finish it, I will just focus on my personal time.

>>  correct!

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