Home work(5.17)
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Could liking chocolate be considered a \"vice\"? Why/why not?
- I don\'t think liking chocolate is a vice. Because children like chocolate. They like its sweet taste.
In case of smoking or drinking, it is illegal under twenties, but chocolate is not.
Surely, eating a lot of chocolate is not good for our health but, we can control it. However, some people can not control alcohol or smoking or drugs or caffeine. It can cause poisoning. Poisoning is a kind of reaseon for vices.
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Could liking chocolate be considered a \"vice\"? Why/why not?>> CORRECT
- I don\'t think liking chocolate is a vice. Because children like chocolate
>> CORRECT
OR I don\'t agree that liking chocolate is a vice because children like it.
They like its sweet taste.
>> CORRECT
OR Its sweet taste is their favorite.
In case of smoking or drinking, it is illegal under twenties, but chocolate is not.
In case of smoking or drinking, it is illegal under twenties, but chocolate is not.
>> In case of smoking or drinking, it is illegal if the person is below 20 years old, but chocolate is not.
Surely, eating a lot of chocolate is not good for our health but, we can control it.
Surely, eating a lot of chocolate is not good for our health but, we can control it.
>> CORRECT
However, some people can not control alcohol or smoking or drugs or caffeine.
However, some people cannot control alcohol, smoking, drugs or caffeine.
It can cause poisoning.
>> CORRECT
Poisoning is a kind of reaseon for vices.
>> Our vices can poison us.
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