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Why do you think the divorce rate has increased in Korea?
I think one of reason is that many women are working. In the past, women quit their job since marriage or having babies. If they divorce, they don\'t have economic power. However, many women continue working even they got married or having babies nowdays. So they have no effect of divorce too much. So, they don\'t want to keep unhappy marriage anymore.
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Hello, Ji [이름]! I must agree with you on this. I think financial independence gives women more courage to do what they think they deserve. Have a happy family! -Faith-
Why do you think the divorce rate has increased in Korea?>> CORRECT
I think one of reason is that many women are working.
I think one of reason is that many women are working.
>> I think one of reasons is that many women are working.
In the past, women quit their job since marriage or having babies.
>> In the past, women quit their job after marriage or having babies.
If they divorce, they don\'t have economic power.
>> If they divorced, they didn\'t have economic power.
However, many women continue working even they got married or having babies nowdays.
>> However, many women continue working even after they get married or having babies nowadays.
So they have no effect of divorce too much.
>> So divorce doesn\'t affect them too much.
So, they don\'t want to keep unhappy marriage anymore.
>> Therefore, they don\'t want to keep an unhappy marriage anymore.
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