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2014-11-12 · 첨삭 강사 Jane

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HOMEWORK FOR TODAY: In not more than 10 sentences, write your thoughts about the following topic: Does age matter in relationships? Yes~ Age matters in relationships sadly. I had a expeirence. I had ever met a woman who is older than I more than 10 years, She wanted to me as her friend. When I met her, I didn't feel any difference from the age. Because I don't care about ages, nationnalities, genders and lookings,something like outbeing. But She told sorry to me when we met on second times and she didnot contact me anymore. how funny and embarrased !! I knew why she did. She didn't accept my open mind, my wealth,fairly behavior and my ages. After this osccasion, I care about ages when I meet someone, specially women. From this experience, I learnd something, If I want to make a friend with who is older, I'd rather pretend to be poorer than he/she is to protect her/his proud. Old ages people like to be superior than young people. But remember, there is always exeptions.

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Hi there, Ms. [이름]! Thank you for your composition! Whoa! That was such a bad experience! I cannot really say that age matters or age doesn\'t matter in relationships. Personally, I believe that it may matter in romantic relationships. On a second thought, they say age doesn\'t matter when two people are in love. In terms of friendship, I\'ve never experienced being treated coldly by my older friends. Though sometimes there\'s an awkward feeling if there\'s a big age gap between me and some old friends, we try to bridge the gap by the common things that we share. T. JanE ^^ In not more than 10 sentences, write your thoughts about the following topic:Does age matter in relationships?>> Correct Yes~ Age matters in relationships sadly. >> Correct I had a expeirence. >> I had an experience.  I had ever met a woman who is older than I more than 10 years, >> I met a woman who is older than me for more than 10 years.  She wanted to me as her friend. >> She wanted to have me as her friend.  When I met her, I didn\'t feel any difference from the age. Because I don\'t care about ages, nationnalities, genders and lookings,something like outbeing. >> When I met her, I didn\'t feel the age gap because I didn\'t care about age, nationality, gender, and physical appearance. But She told sorry to me when we met on second times and she didnot contact me anymore. >> But she said sorry to me when we met for the second time, and she didn\'t contact me anymore.  how funny and embarrased !!>> How funny and embarrassing!  I knew why she did. >> I knew why she did that.  She didn\'t accept my open mind, my wealth,fairly behavior and my ages. >> She couldn\'t accept my being open-mindedness, wealth, fair behavior, and age.  After this osccasion, I care about ages when I meet someone, specially women. >> After this experience, I started to care about age when I meet people, especially women.  From this experience, I learnd something, If I want to make a friend with who is older, I\'d rather pretend to be poorer than he/she is to protect her/his proud. >> From this experience, I learned something: If I want to make friends with someone who is older than me, I must pretend to be poorer than him/her to protect his/her pride.  Old ages people like to be superior than young people.>> Older people like to be superioir to younger people.  But remember, there is always exeptions. >> But remember, there are always exeptions. 

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