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Should birth control pills be avalable to teenage girls without a presciription?
- I think, Teenage girls should get a prescriptiopn for contraceptive pills.
Because the contraceptive pill is also a kind of medicine.
It can hurt health by any means,specially, for growing teenagers.
Contraceptive pill can cause many side effects like heart deseases and blocking blood vessels as I know
To avoid making single moms or produsing married teengers, Controceptive pill is usuful as long as teenage girls control the usage of the pill.
But If they abuse controceptiv pill, they will not be healthy when they grow up for the future.
The reason I say that they have to get a prescription, I want to let they know the values of birth and responsiblily of birth.
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Hi there, Ms. [이름]!
Thank you for your composition! I agree with your opinion. There must be a prescription for contraceptive pills, not only to protect women\'s health, but also to avoid further social problems. Take care and talk to you later!
T. JanE ^^
Should birth control pills be avalable to teenage girls without a presciription?>> Correct
- I think, Teenage girls should get a prescriptiopn for contraceptive pills.>> Correct
Because the contraceptive pill is also a kind of medicine. It can hurt health by any means,specially, for growing teenagers.>> Because contraceptive pills are also medicines, it can harm health in some ways, especially for growing teenagers.
Contraceptive pill can cause many side effects like heart deseases and blocking blood vessels as I know>> As far as I know, contraceptive pills have side effects such as heart disease and blocking of blood vessels.
To avoid making single moms or produsing married teengers, Controceptive pill is usuful as long as teenage girls control the usage of the pill.>> To prevent having single moms or married teenagers, contraceptibe pills are useful as long as women control the usage of pills.
But If they abuse controceptiv pill, they will not be healthy when they grow up for the future. >> But if they overuse contraceptive pills, they will not be healthy when they grow up in the future.
The reason I say that they have to get a prescription, I want to let they know the values of birth and responsiblily of birth.
>> Another reason why I believe they should get a prescription is that I want to let them know the value of birth and the responsibilities thereafter.
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