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what objects tell the story of your life?
Does it mean what objects I owe represnts of my life?
I had a stand mirror in my office. I bought the mirror more than 20 years ago.
I still remember the day when I bought the mirror at the market.
I was a fresh man in university, that day, I got my pay for part time job.
It was the first money I made in my life. I planed to buy a big and stand mirror for me and I went to the market straightly and bought the mirror.
But the probolem is, the mirror is so big and heavy to carry to my house by myself. It's almost my hights. Seller said, If I want to use delivery service, I have to pay. I hesitated because I had to take subway and walked for 10 mimutes carrying with the big and tall mirror, but finally, I decided to carry by my self to save the money.
I was 20's, I tought I could do that. But It was a long and painful jurney I had ever had. I will let you imagine after the story.
The mirror reflected 20's [이름] and reflects me stil.
강사 첨삭
Hi there, Ms. [이름]!
Thank you for your composition! I tried to answer my own question, but I can\'t pick any object that can really represent my life so far. For my childhood, I guess my pictures tell the story of my life. Maybe I have yet to find something that will really represent my life.
T. JanE ^^
what objects tell the story of your life?>> Correct
Does it mean what objects I owe represnts of my life?>> Does it mean objects that represent my life?
I had a stand mirror in my office.
>> Correct
I bought the mirror more than 20 years ago. >> Correct
I still remember the day when I bought the mirror at the market. >> Correct
I was a fresh man in university, that day, I got my pay for part time job. >> I was a freshman in university. On that day, I got my pay from my part time job.
It was the first money I made in my life. >> Correct
I planed to buy a big and stand mirror for me and I went to the market straightly and bought the mirror. >> I planned to buy life-sized mirror for myself, so I went straight to the market and bought the mirror.
But the problem is, the mirror is so big and heavy to carry to my house by myself.
>> Correct
It\'s almost my hights.
>> It\'s almost as tall as me.
Seller said, If I want to use delivery service, I have to pay. >> The seller said, if I want to use the delivery service, I have to pay.
I hesitated because I had to take subway and walked for 10 mimutes carrying with the big and tall mirror, but finally, I decided to carry by my self to save the money. >> I hesitated because I had to take the subway and walk for 10 minutes, but I finally decided to carry it by myself to save money.
I was 20\'s, I tought I could do that.
>> I was in my 20\'s, so I thought I could do that.
But It was a long and painful jurney I had ever had. >> But it was a long and painful journey I had.
I will let you imagine after the story. >> Correct
The mirror reflected 20\'s [이름] and reflects me stil. >> The mirror reflected me in my 20\'s and it still reflects me.
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