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2014-11-27 · 첨삭 강사 Jane

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Would you consider getting a tattoo? Yes,Of course, I really really want to get a tatto still. But I cannot find tatto shop in here becuase tatto shop is illegal in korea. If I want to have a tatto, I have to go to a clinic. Isn't it funny? Doctor draws a tatto.. Anyway, I recall someone when I think tattoo. I met a guy when I was in Newzealand, he has tattoos all his body even his fingers. He always envied my body becase he regarded my body as a clean drawing paper. He became a famous entertainer in Indonesia now. If I have a tattoo, I want to get a samll yellow tulip on my wrist or waist. I see my yellow tulip everyday. how nice it is! I want to go straight to get a tattoo now!

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Hi there, Ms. [이름]! Thank you for your composition today! You must really like this topic! Well, getting a tattoo was my dream when I was younger. Now, I don\'t really like it because I already know how tattoos are made. T. JanE ^^ Would you consider getting a tattoo?>> Correct Yes,Of course, I really really want to get a tatto still.>> Yes, of course! I still really want to get a tattoo.  But I cannot find tatto shop in here becuase tatto shop is illegal in korea.>> However, I cannot find any tattoo shop here in korea because it is illegal.  If I want to have a tattoo, I have to go to a clinic. >> Correct Isn\'t it funny? Doctor draws a tattoo.. >> Correct Anyway, I recall someone when I think tattoo.>> Anyway, I remember someone when I think about tattoos.  I met a guy when I was in Newzealand, he has tattoos all his body even his fingers.>> I met a guy when I was in New Zealand; he has tattoos all over his body, even on his fingers! He always envied my body becase he regarded my body as a clean drawing paper.>> Correct He became a famous entertainer in Indonesia now. >> He is a famous entertainer in Indonesia now.  If I have a tattoo, I want to get a samll yellow tulip on my wrist or waist.>> If I could get a tattoo, I would have a small yellow tulip on my wrist or waist.  I see my yellow tulip everyday. >> I could see my yellow tulip everyday.  how nice it is!>> Correct I want to go straight to get a tattoo now! >> Correct

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