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Hello Jessie!
These days I am busy. In the old days, nine a.m to six p.m,
I am working, exercise, clean the my house and do the laundry.
But I start date, I had little free time.
So I'm happy but little hard. I want more strong.^^
After a long time let's talk about homework.
If I have own business, I want small and lovely cafe.
I like cafe. Because I love aroma of coffe.
If I am stand the cafe, I read a book, listen to the music.
I don't need many vistior and money.
I will invite to the my friends in my cafe. ^^
강사 첨삭
Hi there [이름]!
Thanks for sharing your opinion.
I hope that you can have your own cafe so I can go there in the future. ^_^
Well, I am glad that you are happy and I know that in time, you can be more familiar with your new routine.
Have an enjoyable day!
~T. Jessie~
Hello Jessie!
>> Correct!
These days I am busy.
>> Correct!
In the old days, nine a.m to six p.m, I am working, exercise, clean the my house and do the laundry.
>> In the old days, from nine a.m to six p.m, I work, exercise, clean my house and do the laundry.
OR>> A month ago, from nine a.m to six p.m, I work, exercise, clean my house and do the laundry.
But I start date, I had little free time.
>> But when I started to work, I have a little free time.
So I\'m happy but little hard.
>> So I\'m happy but it\'s a little hard.
I want more strong.^^
>> I want to be stronger.^^
After a long time let\'s talk about homework.
>> Correct!
If I have own business, I want small and lovely cafe.
>> If I can have my own business, I want a small and lovely cafe.
I like cafe.
>> I like a cafe because I love the aroma of coffee.
Because I love aroma of coffe.
>> I like a cafe because I love the aroma of coffee.
If I am stand the cafe, I read a book, listen to the music.
>> If I have my cafe, I can just read a book and listen to the music.
I don\'t need many vistior and money.
>> I don\'t need many visitors and money.
I will invite to the my friends in my cafe. ^^
>> I will invite my friends in my cafe.
Thanks for sharing your opinion.
I hope that you can have your own cafe so I can go there in the future. ^_^
Well, I am glad that you are happy and I know that in time, you can be more familiar with your new routine.
Have an enjoyable day!
~T. Jessie~
Hello Jessie!
>> Correct!
These days I am busy.
>> Correct!
In the old days, nine a.m to six p.m, I am working, exercise, clean the my house and do the laundry.
>> In the old days, from nine a.m to six p.m, I work, exercise, clean my house and do the laundry.
OR>> A month ago, from nine a.m to six p.m, I work, exercise, clean my house and do the laundry.
But I start date, I had little free time.
>> But when I started to work, I have a little free time.
So I\'m happy but little hard.
>> So I\'m happy but it\'s a little hard.
I want more strong.^^
>> I want to be stronger.^^
After a long time let\'s talk about homework.
>> Correct!
If I have own business, I want small and lovely cafe.
>> If I can have my own business, I want a small and lovely cafe.
I like cafe.
>> I like a cafe because I love the aroma of coffee.
Because I love aroma of coffe.
>> I like a cafe because I love the aroma of coffee.
If I am stand the cafe, I read a book, listen to the music.
>> If I have my cafe, I can just read a book and listen to the music.
I don\'t need many vistior and money.
>> I don\'t need many visitors and money.
I will invite to the my friends in my cafe. ^^
>> I will invite my friends in my cafe.
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