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Hello Jessie.
I have worry.
My boyfriend will go to spain Santiago.
Santiago has the way of St.James.
He will wallk mountain path toal 800km.
Maybe he will lose weight.
But I cant't exercise as my boyfriend wallk as hard sports.
I will gain weight. bohoo. bohoo..
Anyawy tallk about homework. HaHa.
When I a child, my best friend was my sister and brother.
As a child, We lived in the country side.
So we usually went to the tump.
We handpicked raspberries and fed paper to goat.hehe
When spring came,many wild flowers bloomed here and there.
I ran to the everywhere and eating, playing.
Every day I were very happy.
I felt that I became like as princess in fairy table.
I had not worry, gripe and resentment.
We were not lack to life.
I really missed that times.
Now I had manything. But sometimes I felt futility.
I don't know why I feel shortage.
강사 첨삭
Hi there [이름]!
I think you need to plan your diet now.^_^hahaha
I enjoyed reading your composition. You gave a very good description of your childhood.
Well, sometimes, I also feel the same way as you do.
Like something is missing. But I think that\'s what we have to look for.
What might it be? Anyway, let\'s just try to enjoy our lives as much as we can.
See you on Monday!
~T. Jessie~
Hello Jessie.
>> Correct!I have worry.
>> I am worried. My boyfriend will go to spain Santiago.
>> My boyfriend will go to Santiago, Spain.Santiago has the way of St.James.
>> Do you mean: There is what they call St. James in Santiago.
He will wallk mountain path toal 800km.
>> He will walk a total of 800 km. Maybe he will lose weight.
>> Correct!But I cant\'t exercise as my boyfriend wallk as hard sports.
>> Do you mean: But I can\'t exercise while my boyfriend is playing sports.
I will gain weight. bohoo. bohoo..>> Correct!Anyawy tallk about homework. HaHa. >> Anyway, let\'s tallk about the homework. HaHa. When I a child, my best friend was my sister and brother.
>> When I was a child, my best friends were my sister and brother.As a child, We lived in the country side.
>> At that time, we lived in the country side. So we usually went to the tump.
>> Correct!We handpicked raspberries and fed paper to goat.hehe
>> We handpicked raspberries and fed the goats paper.heheWhen spring came,many wild flowers bloomed here and there.>> Correct!
I ran to the everywhere and eating, playing.
>> I ran everywhere, ate and play.
Every day I were very happy.
>> I was happy everyday.I felt that I became like as princess in fairy table.
>> I felt that I became like a princess in a fairy table.I had not worry, gripe and resentment. >> I don\'t have any worries, gripe or resentment.
We were not lack to life.
>> Do you mean: We had everything in life.I really missed that times.
>> I really miss those times.Now I had manything.
>> Now, I have many things.
But sometimes I felt futility.
>> But sometimes, I fell futile.I don\'t know why I feel shortage.
>> I don\'t know why I feel like I lack something.
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