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Hello Jessie. ^^
Yesterday I was very busy. Umm.. Today is normal.
It's break time. hmm... l'm very tired. hahaha
I know one person who lives successful life.
When he was child, he lived remote the countryside.
He was small child and had darker skin than Korean.
Because his parents was farmer.
And his family member was seven.
Their circumstance was poverty.
When he was fourteen years-old, he was leaved the house.
His father got force only study hard at the city.
So Young child lived alone and solved everything.
For a long time, He was study hard. Finally he got a scholarship and
was drafted employee by public enterprise.
The present he has three children.
He is perfect father. As you know he is my father.
I think my father is Successful person to me.
강사 첨삭
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I love your composition. ^_^
Indeed, your father is. ^_^ I hope that you can also be a successful person someday. ^_^
Thanks for sharing this to me. I came to know you better. ^_^
Well, let\'s enjoy this enjoyable Thrudsday.
See you!~T. Jessie~
Hello Jessie. ^^
>> Correct!Yesterday I was very busy.
>> Correct!Umm.. Today is normal.
>> Correct!It\'s break time. hmm...
>> Correct!
l\'m very tired. hahaha>> Correct!I know one person who lives successful life.
>> I know one person who lives a successful life.When he was child, he lived remote the countryside.
>> When he was a child, he lived in a remote countryside. He was small child and had darker skin than Korean.
>> He was a small child and he had darker skin than the other Koreans.Because his parents was farmer.
>> Because his parents were farmers. And his family member was seven.
>> And he has seven family members.Their circumstance was poverty.
>> They were poor.When he was fourteen years-old, he was leaved the house.
>> When he was fourteen years-old, he left their house. His father got force only study hard at the city.
>> Do you mean: His father forced him to study hard in the city. So Young child lived alone and solved everything.
>> So the young child lived alone and solved everything. For a long time, He was study hard.
>> For a long time, he studied hard.
Finally he got a scholarship and was drafted employee by public enterprise.
>> Finally he got a scholarship and was drafted as an employee by public enterprise.
The present he has three children.
>> At present, he has three children.He is perfect father.
>> He is a perfect father.
As you know he is my father.
>> Correct!I think my father is Successful person to me.
>> I think my father is a successful person.
OR>> For me, my father is a successful person.
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