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2015-02-13 · 첨삭 강사 Jessie

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Do you think criminals can change? Hello Jessie. I'm very busy today. I barely have little free time. The rest of work will do to tomorrow. I want to funny thing. hahaha Anyway, I think criminals change is very difficulty, Because they have crime. For a long time many country implemented strong law. to stop violent crimes. But bad incident still occured. Criminals have motive why they commit crime. Some people think criminal's an old wound can cure. But it need to very long time and many people will help. Naturally a few special exception expect. For example very poor young childern's crime share a reason. And must find good way of solution how to make them to very happy.

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Good morning [이름]! Thanks for making another composition. Don\'t you worry my dear. You can have plenty of rest next week. ^_^ Thanks for sharing your opinion about this matter. I believe that it depends on the person and the situation. Well, I\'ll see you later! ~T. Jessie~ Do you think criminals can change? Hello Jessie. >> Correct!I\'m very busy today. >> Correct!I barely have little free time. >> I barely have free time. The rest of work will do to tomorrow. >> I will do the rest of the work tomorrow. I want to funny thing. hahaha>> I want to have fun. hahahaAnyway, I think criminals change is very difficulty, Because they have crime. >> Anyway, I think it is difficult for criminals to change because they already committed a crime. For a long time many country implemented strong law. >> For a long time, many countries implemented a lot of laws to stop violent crimes.to stop violent crimes. >> For a long time, many countries implemented a lot of laws to stop violent crimes.But bad incident still occured. >> Correct!Criminals have motive why they commit crime. >> Criminals have motives why they commit a crime. Some people think criminal\'s an old wound can cure. >> Do you mean: Some people think that a criminal\'s wound can be cured. But it need to very long time and many people will help. >> But it needs a very long time and many people should help.Naturally a few special exception expect. >> Naturally, there are a few special exceptions.For example very poor young childern\'s crime share a reason. >> For example, very poor young children\'s crimes have reasons.And must find good way of solution how to make them to very happy. >> And we should find good ways to make them very happy.

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