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what kinds of things do you do to improve/maintain your appearance?
Hello. Jessie.
Today, I feel the day is very fast.
Twenty-four hours a day is very short time.
Before I usually go to bed, I decide to hard to do everything to tomorrow.
But I went my house, I got lazy.
I try to get up early in the morning.
Because use to free time.
I prepare to future, so I read a book, newspaper and study English.
I know that I'm normal. Profound change comes slowly.
I hope that I receive result of effort on the end of this year.
Maybe I will be beautiful, strong and famous. haha
But need the time. About ten year? haha.
강사 첨삭
Good morning!
Thanks for your composition.
Wow! That\'s good. You have a goal then.
Well, I hope you\'ll attain that goal in ten years. ^_^
Enjoy this day!
See you!
~T. Jessie~
what kinds of things do you do to improve/maintain your appearance?>> What kinds of things do you do to improve/maintain your appearance?Hello. Jessie.
>> Correct!
OR>> Hello Jessie!Today, I feel the day is very fast.
>> Today, I feel that the day is very fast.Twenty-four hours a day is very short time.
>> Twenty-four hours a day is a very short time. Before I usually go to bed, I decide to hard to do everything to tomorrow.
>> Before I go to bed, I usually decide to do everything tomorrow.But I went my house, I got lazy. >> But when I go to my house, I get lazy.I try to get up early in the morning.
>> Correct!Because use to free time.
>> Because I have to use my free time.I prepare to future, so I read a book, newspaper and study English.
>> I am preparing for the future so I read books, newspaper and study English.I know that I\'m normal. >> Correct!
Profound change comes slowly.
>> Correct!I hope that I receive result of effort on the end of this year.
>> I hope that I will receive good results Maybe I will be beautiful, strong and famous. haha
>> Correct!But need the time. >> But I need time.
About ten year? haha.
>> Maybe about ten years?
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