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2015-02-27 · 첨삭 강사 Jessie

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The world's population is increasing rapidly. Getting clean water for everyone might become difficult in the future. Think of three ways we can avoid this problem. Hello. Jessie. phew.. Today is busy. I hope to go to the my house. haha Thanks for your attention. I know I need a grammar study. But I'm sleepyhead. hehe When I open my book, I feel sleepiness. But I love English. Because I like Jessie and our class.^^ Every day I might fail, however I believe that my skill improve. haha Anyway, I awake to water is lake in the future. umm.. I think the best way is tree. Because trees prevent desertification. If rain come, Trees save underground water. Second, we try to inhibit global warming. These days the most environmental problem is change in the weather. Quite a drought will bring to water war. So the country of OECD might suggest discuss solution. Third we appreciate to water. ^^ We should pay environment tax. Maybe before long...

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Good morning! Thanks fo much for sharing your ideas. Indeed, this is a very serious problem. So we should take it seriously. We should also conserve water. Anyway, see you later! ~T. Jessie~ The world\'s population is increasing rapidly.Getting clean water for everyone might become difficult in the future.Think of three ways we can avoid this problem.Hello. Jessie. >> Correct! >> Hello Jessie!phew.. Today is busy. >> Correct!I hope to go to the my house. haha >> I hope to go to my house. hahaThanks for your attention. >> Correct!I know I need a grammar study. >>  I know I need to study grammar.But I\'m sleepyhead. hehe >> But I\'m a sleepyhead. heheWhen I open my book, I feel sleepiness. >> When I open my book, I feel sleepy. But I love English. >> Correct! Because I like Jessie and our class.^^ >> Correct!Every day I might fail, however I believe that my skill improve. haha>> Every day I might fail, however I believe that my skill is improving. hahaAnyway, I awake to water is lake in the future. >> Do you mean: Anyway, I hope that there will be a lake of water in the future. umm.. I think the best way is tree. >> I think the best way is by planting trees.Because trees prevent desertification. >> Correct!If rain come, Trees save underground water. >> If rain comes, the trees store underground water.Second, we try to inhibit global warming.>> Second, we should try to inhibit global warming.These days the most environmental problem is change in the weather. >> These days, the most serious environmental problem is climate change. Quite a drought will bring to water war. >> Do you mean: Drought will bring war because of water.So the country of OECD might suggest discuss solution.>> So OECD should discuss some solutions.Third we appreciate to water. ^^ >> Third we have to appreciate the importance of water. ^^We should pay environment tax. >> We should pay environmental tax Maybe before long... >> Maybe it will take a long time.

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