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What do you think is the most important subject in elementary school?
Why?
Hello Jessie. ^^
Today comment is Very fun. haha.
Doctor looks like patient. Is he really doctor?
Anyway, I think the most important subject is physical education.
Because young students is period of growth.
Many student spend to sit in the desk.
I consider they need to a direct experience.
If they are only study with books, they will be individualism.
Study is not condition of happy.
Elementary school have to find to young student.
In that means, outdoor activity help to a students.
Thank you.
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Good noon!
I am glad that my comment made you smile. ^__^
I also appreciate your effort in doing your homework.
I corrected your composition but I\'m not quite sure if I got all your ideas correctly.
Please go over them. See you!
~T. Jessie~
What do you think is the most important subject in elementary school?Why?Hello Jessie. ^^
>> Correct!Today comment is Very fun. haha.
>> Today\'s comment is very funny. haha.Doctor looks like patient.
>> The doctor looks like the patient.
Is he really doctor?
>> Is he really a doctor?Anyway, I think the most important subject is physical education.
>> Correct!Because young students is period of growth.
>> Because it is the young students\' period of growth.Many student spend to sit in the desk.
>> Many students spend a lot of time sitting on a desk.I consider they need to a direct experience.
>> I believe that they need actual experiences.If they are only study with books, they will be individualism.
>> If they only study books, there will be individualism.Study is not condition of happy.
>> Studying is not a condition to be happy.Elementary school have to find to young student.
>> Do you mean: Elementary schools have to find young students.
OR>> Do you mean: Elementary schools should improve young students.In that means, outdoor activity help to a students. >> That means, outdoor activities help students. Thank you.
>> Correct!
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