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Hello Jessie.
I'm a crazy now.
Because I feel heavy sleep.
HAHA.. But I don't have breaktime.
Bohoo.. It is very painful. I looks like twisted bread stick. HaHa
I know the high volume of traffic problem.
I consider the problem's key word is conversation and nature preference.
Modern People prefer technology.
I also agree that technology of civilization is essential in live.
For example, water pipe in city is possible to clean body and cook, drink.
People gain usability for little effort.
One of typical nosie's cause car is daily necssity.
City's life is very fast.
People need faster and faster.
Car is good transport. The car of using reduce economy of time.
But the irony is people hope serene night.
They want to enjoy their break time.
So I suggest to ilmit time.
At midnight, people refrain using home appliances, ca
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Wake up twisted breadstick! ^__^hahhaha
Thanks for sharing your opinion.
I\'m not quite sure if I understand your sentences correctly.
Please go over them.See you tomorrow!
~T. Jessie~
Hello Jessie.
>> Correct!I\'m a crazy now.
>> I\'m crazy now. Because I feel heavy sleep.
>> Because I feel realy sleepy.HAHA.. But I don\'t have breaktime.
>> Correct!Bohoo.. It is very painful.
>> Correct!
I looks like twisted bread stick. HaHa >> I look like a twisted bread stick.I know the high volume of traffic problem.
>> I know that there is a high volume of traffic.
I consider the problem\'s key word is conversation and nature preference.
>> I considered that the problem\'s key word is conservation and nature preference.Modern People prefer technology. >> Modern people prefer technology.
I also agree that technology of civilization is essential in live.
>> I also agree that technology is essential in our lives.For example, water pipe in city is possible to clean body and cook, drink.
>> For example, water pipes in a city are needed for people to have water to clean the body, cook and drink.
People gain usability for little effort.
>> People can use it even with little effort.One of typical nosie\'s cause car is daily necssity.
>> One typical example is the car\'s noise.City\'s life is very fast.
>> The life in a city is very fast.People need faster and faster.
>> People need to be faster and faster.Car is good transport.
>> A car is a good transportation.
The car of using reduce economy of time.
>> If you use a car, your travel time is reduced.But the irony is people hope serene night.
>> But the irony is people hope for a serene night. They want to enjoy their break time.
>> Correct!So I suggest to ilmit time.
>> So I suggest that there should be a limitation.At midnight, people refrain using home appliances, ca
>> At midnight, people should refrain from using home appliances.
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