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2015-04-15 · 첨삭 강사 Jessie

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What three countries countries will you never visit? Why? Hello Jessie. Thanks for your comment. I think that city life is very comfortable than countryside life. I hope to live in countryside . But in order to do that I will be famous. haha. I realize that these day I talked about worry continuous income. So I practice for high goal without plan. And relieve tension. That is reason, I want to go trip. Is today topic afraid to visit country? Umm.. I don't know what I afraid of country. Umm..I hate country at war. For example, They are Iraq,Irak, Israel, Palestine. Sometimes people think living is more difficult than death. But that countries are easily killing. I am supporting the young boy in Mongolia. His family is poor. But they give help to neighbor. I want to change kind the other country consciousness.

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Good morning! Thanks for sharing this to me. Well, there will really come a time for us to think about those kinds of things. I think it is natural. For now, you should think about the goals that you want to achieve. ^_^ Anyway, enjoy your day! See you! ~T. Jessie~ What three countries countries will you never visit? Why?Hello Jessie. >> Correct! Thanks for your comment. >> Correct!I think that city life is very comfortable than countryside life. >> I think that city life is more comfortable than countryside life. OR>> I think life in the city is more comfortable than life in the countryside.I hope to live in countryside . >> I hope to live in the countryside. But in order to do that I will be famous. haha. >> But in order to do that I should be be famous. haha.I realize that these day I talked about worry continuous income. >> I realize that these day I often talked about my worries about continuous income.So I practice for high goal without plan. >> Do you mean: So I try to attain my goals without any plans. And relieve tension. >> And to relieve tension.That is reason, I want to go trip. >> That is the reason why I want to go on a trip.Is today topic afraid to visit country? >> Is today\'s topic about the countries that I\'m afraid to visit?Umm.. I don\'t know what I afraid of country. >> I don\'t know what country am I afraid to visit. Umm..I hate country at war. >> I hate countries which are on war.For example, They are Iraq,Irak, Israel, Palestine. >> For example, Iraq, Israel, Palestine. Sometimes people think living is more difficult than death. >> Sometimes people think living is more difficult than dying.But that countries are easily killing. >> But killing is very easy in those countries.I am supporting the young boy in Mongolia. >> I am supporting a young boy in Mongolia.His family is poor. >> Correct! But they give help to neighbor. >> But they help their neighbor.I want to change kind the other country consciousness. >> Do you mean: I want to change that kind of country\'s consciousness.

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