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2015-04-22 · 첨삭 강사 Jessie

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Hello Jessie. Why modern people gets a stress more and more every days? Naturally we have worry about our life, health, etc. But modern people's stress cause emotional damage. Umm..I recommend to eat hot spicy food. When we eat hot food, we will be a sweat heavily. After that we take a quick shower. Then we are gain form. Because other activity give aid to forget stress. And I suggest to sleep or nap. Because seen from my experience, exhausted condition get a stressful. So good food, good sleep reduce stress.

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[이름]! Thanks for once again writing a composition. You mention some good ways on how to reduce stress. ^_^ Please review your sentences. ^_^ I\'ll see you tomorrow! ~T. Jessie~ Hello Jessie. >> Correct!Why modern people gets a stress more and more every days? >> Why do modern people get stress more and more every day?Naturally we have worry about our life, health, etc. >> Naturally we have worries about our life, health, etc.But modern people\'s stress cause emotional damage.>> But modern people\'s stress causes emotional damage.mm..I recommend to eat hot spicy food. >> Correct! When we eat hot food, we will be a sweat heavily. >> When we eat hot food, we can sweat heavily. After that we take a quick shower. >> After that we can take a quick shower. Then we are gain form. >> Then we can gain form again. OR>> Then we can be revitalized. Because other activity give aid to forget stress. >> Because other activities aid in forgetting stress. And I suggest to sleep or nap. >> And I suggest to sleep or to take a nap. Because seen from my experience, exhausted condition get a stressful. >> Because from my experiences, exhaustion can cause stress.So good food, good sleep reduce stress. >> Correct! OR>> So good food and good sleep reduce stress.

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