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Learning about the past has no value for those of us living in the present.
Do you agree or disagree?
Hello Jessie.
Sometimes the past consider old people.
I want to talk one sport-star.
He is famous sport man and a sad star.
He has two name. one is Korea name 'Aha-Hyun-soo' and the other name is 'Victor Ahn'
He was Korean skater Until 2006 but the present he is Russian.
He had champion for five-years.
However he had a hard knee injury.
When he's skill down, Korea physical association turn away him.
Loving skating man decided to change country.
Because Korea sport has unfair treatment to school relations and kinship.
He didn't have ability background.
Finally He successed one-more champion in 2014 Fisht Olympic.
After that Korea skating can be more clean management.
The past mistake is the future's sense of direction.
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Thanks once again for sharing your opinion.
I understood some of them but I\'m not quite sure if I got some of your sentences correctly.
Anyway, we better enjoy our weekend.
See you!
~T. Jessie~
Learning about the past has no value for those of us living in the present.Do you agree or disagree? Hello Jessie.
>> Correct!Sometimes the past consider old people.
>> Do you mean: Sometimes, old people are part of the past.
I want to talk one sport-star.
>> I want to talk to one sport-star.
He is famous sport man and a sad star.
>> He is famous a sport man and a sad star. He has two name.
>> He has two names.
one is Korea name \'Aha-Hyun-soo\' and the other name is \'Victor Ahn\'
>> One is Korean name which is \'Aha-Hyun-soo\' and the other name is \'Victor Ahn\'.He was Korean skater Until 2006 but the present he is Russian.
>> He was a Korean skater until 2006 but at present, he is Russian.He had champion for five-years.
>> He has been a champion for five years.However he had a hard knee injury.
>> However, he had a serious knee injury.When he\'s skill down, Korea physical association turn away him.
>> When his skill was down, Korea\'s Physical Association turned him away.
Loving skating man decided to change country.
>> The loving skating man decided to go to another country and change his nationality.Because Korea sport has unfair treatment to school relations and kinship.
>> Do you mean: Because in Korea, the treatment is unfair.
He didn\'t have ability background.
>> He didn\'t have a good background.Finally He successed one-more champion in 2014 Fisht Olympic.>> Finally, he succeeded one-more championship in 2014 Fisht Olympic.
After that Korea skating can be more clean management.
>> After that Korea\'s skating has better management.The past mistake is the future\'s sense of direction.
>> Correct!
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